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Post by .:*:Becka:*:. on Nov 15, 2007 17:36:00 GMT -5
holy hell, i just finished chap. 11 oh lordy lordy i have totally spaced out in that chapter, holy cow... so intense and so sensational... phew i need a break to finish reading chap. 12 oh wow ellie that was a great chapter and i truly loved the chapter! sure got me xcited ill admit it! hehe WONDERFUL JOB!!!
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Post by magpie on Nov 16, 2007 17:18:25 GMT -5
Review for Chapter 14...
Well, you said someone will connect with Amelia. I liked this chapter (duh!).
You keep touching on the different relationships that all the boys have with Amelia, you never rush past any details and thats what makes this story so rad.
I kind of felt sorry for Kate and I can understand her anger, no one wants to feel like they didnt mean enough to another person, its not a nice feeling. Major kudos to you for writing that Kate/Pogue scene, it was one of my favorite scenes this chapter. I loved how level headed you made Pogue for the scene where he and Kate are "fighting". He showed so much maturity by telling her to not blame Amelia. It wil lbe interesting to see the Kate/Amelia dynamic being that she still has no clue as to the fact that Kate knows.
Again you infiltrate teh story with very ominous undertones, its the little things that kind of send shivers up my spine, not only with the whole Staughton situation but also the internal workings of the Cov boys...something is brewing and I am yet to figure it all out.
The whole Tyler/Reid scene was so awesome. Loved Reid's commentary. FOr me at least(and maybe this is wishful thinking) the whole connection process kinda put Tyler out of teh race for romantic lead and more on par with confidante and brother. He recognized that within Amelia there was a love that was not his own add to teh fact that she actually came clean to him about her and Pogue.
General observations...
Loved the fact that Amelia called Pogue first...so sweet. Caleb is going to hit the roof pretty soon, that girl has him wound tighter than a rope and reid...well Reid I am worried about most, he is very impulsive and might actually try something with Amelia, no doubt Pogue wil lprobably want to tear him apart.
So yeah,I loved this chapter,cant wait for teh next one...hint hint.
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Post by Ellie on Nov 20, 2007 9:38:02 GMT -5
I noticed that when I modify the initial post with new chapters for my fiction that it doesn't count as a new post (makes sense). So unless you check this post daily/nightly (when I usually add new chapters) you can't tell when one's been added. If anyone wants to be notified when a new chapter has been posted just PM me and I'll PM you or email you when I've updated with a new chapter! Let me know which way you'd prefer to be notified and I'll make a note of it I hope you're all still enjoying!!
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Post by magpie on Nov 20, 2007 18:44:19 GMT -5
Whoo..Im MIA for 24hours only to come back and find 2 new chapters..Im one happy girl right now.
Okay, Review for Chapter 14.
Very nice chapter, creepy but nice. Kate was being a grade A "femme de chien" or something in that respect though Im not sure whether it was 100% her. My bet is on Staughton elevating her emotions, he can use emotionally unstable people as a vessal,Kate was angry and confused so yeah, im hoping thats the case,Amelia needs a friend.
Loved how Reid came to the rescue and his honesty with Amelia,he could have used a dozen line sbut he simply came clean. Though,as an ardent Pogue/Amelia shipper i kinda cringed when tehy kissed but I know its all part of the storyline and this is what set this story apart from others,nothing about tehse characters are ever only black and white...lots and lots of grey areas.
Reid and the escalating tension he has going with Pogue is getting really well, tense. I expected them to go for teh jugualr when meeting at Caleb's house but Caleb as usual tried and succeeded in staying any immediate bloodshed.
Amelia taking a breather was a very clever little plot device from you to make this story even more complex and character driven, i can only imagine the antics that will ensue now that the Cov boys pitched up on her front porch. Her father's reactions will be priceless methinks. You have me very curious as to what is going on with Amelia's mother, again I imagine Staughton has aghostly finger in this pie yes?
Very nice writing ladyfriend.
Okay,Im off to read the next chapter.
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Post by magpie on Nov 20, 2007 19:19:26 GMT -5
Chapter 15 review...
Sheesh,what a tense fricken chapter. I loved the banter between Amelia's dad and the boys,especially when he told POgue that 'he'd have a talk with him later on". please write that scene,I will simply love it Im sure.
Regarding Pogue and Amelia: I love how intense you are writing their moments together without them overshadowing the rest of the storyline. Its the little things that make them so adorable, a crooked smile, him stroking her leg in comfort,holding her hand underneath the table...its just makes me go "squeeee".
So Reid has really redeemed himself in my eyes,,,he is really going above and beyond when it comes to protecting Amelia and her family as well as keeping his temper in check...very admirable.
Poor Caleb, that boy is really having a tough time,wanting to be with Amelia,wanting to protect the group,wanting to keep everything togehter...all i can say is shame,poor boy.
Tyler is getting wittier by the chapter...love it.
Hmmm, who is this mysterious girl Amelia is seeing in her mind,my bet is its her alter-ego/conscience or soemthing like that. Cant wait to read the next chapter!!!
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Post by Maggie on Nov 20, 2007 21:50:39 GMT -5
Ellie, I think it's FANTASTIC!! I LOVE a good action/drama/romance fanfic!!! Just something that will grab a reader's attention...and THIS fanfic TAKES THE CAKE!!! KUDOS TO YOU! = ]]
PLEASE WRITE MORE!!! = ]]]]]
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Post by Ellie on Nov 21, 2007 8:01:04 GMT -5
I thought that posting two long chapters within 24 hours of each other would make you a happy girl, Mags, which is why I rushed Paladin to do it!! ;D I've said it once and I'll say it again- you girls make this fic so worth writing. The last two chapters came so easy for me because Amelia is on her turf, and what will happen when the boys "invade" that? I had so much fun on Chapter 15 I couldn't stand it. I actually finished writing the chapter and felt victorious. Author's notes (yes, I'm being a nice Ellie and tossing out goodies : - Reid is finally getting to shine through and show more of himself to Amelia. This makes the tension escalate even more throughout the whole group and eventually, along with Pogue's growing antsiness, it will blow.
- At this point I still want to say that no one is out of the running yet. You might be starting to think "Geesh! Just have her pick a guy already or this will never end!" but believe me, there is method in my madness. Your patience will pay off, I hope!
- Stoughton is going to become more aware of what the group is capable of which won't help their situation...his threats will go from spectral to downright dangerous.
- Who *is* the little girl that has wormed her way into Amelia's mind? Figment of the imagination, conscious personified, or something else? You'll find out in Chapter 16 or 17, I haven't decided yet. But she is of the utmost importance and is very, very dear to my heart.
Well, that's it for now. I'm on page six of the next chapter and with the holidays coming up it probably won't be up until after Thanksgiving, so look for it then. (Besides the fact my kids have been absolutely *nuts* around here and not letting me write and hubby is dying for some computer time!!) Thanks again for the praise and *squees*! I live for 'em!
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Post by magpie on Nov 23, 2007 12:53:24 GMT -5
Review for Chapter 16!
Wow,what a frikken chapter, the drama,the underlying romance, the tension...you really delivered teh goods on this one ladyfriend.
Okay so im not going to spend too much time reviewing this time,I dont think...lol
There are two things that kind of jumped out at me when reading this post....okay lets start with Pogue...is there anything else you are not telling me about his character and his power, especially when Reid called him "little wolfie" and Pogue reacted quite strongly with a "shut up". Enquiring minds need to know yes?
Secondly, the newly named Anna. First I thought okay so maybe she is some kind of spirit guide, Amelia sure feels a connection to her but then two very particular things made me connect some dots, wheter its the right connection i dont know but...Anna doesnt want to tell Amelia too much ,almost as if she is afraid of ruining too much, letting them know too much too soon and then Amelia "named" Anna AND Anna said that POGUE would like the name or something to that extent...might I assume that by any chance Anna shares some DNA with Amelia and the oh so broody one?
Caleb: LOVED his freak out, you wrote him so powerful, kinda reminding us that he still is one of teh most powerful boys in the Cov. Poor Tyler, even during freakout times he comes away unscathed...a very true characteristic of him.
Reid and Pogue getting into it was much needed and much loved by this reader.I didnt even breath whilst reading their scenes. Soooo Goood!!!!!
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Post by Ellie on Nov 24, 2007 10:05:23 GMT -5
Mags, I'm so glad you enjoyed Here is my breakdown, LoL Caleb had been holding too much in for too long and he finally imploded, LoL...and not in a good guy kinda way. I know that through Paladin a little, how he was using his Powers, but he wasn't exactly thinking clearly in his blind anger. And Anna...well, let's just hope people that haven't gotten this far in the story don't catch the spoilers, LoL. I have this fic posted on my Toby and Taylor forums as well and two girls on my Toby forum figured out Anna almost immediately, hehe...I'm not sure I was going for that, but everyone interprets writing in different ways...so, yes, you've got it And boy is Anna going to have some earth-shattering info for Amelia beyond her own identity coming up in the next chapter. Just to warn you, it's an overwhelming one. It's more of a Reid and Caleb-centered chapter because I'm just fair that way, hehe. So much happens and comes to light that the threat of your brain exploding *might* just happen, lol...it's currently in process with extensive feedback from Paladin as I go...I need it for this one. *squidges* Talk to you soon with more!!!
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Post by Ellie on Nov 26, 2007 7:41:21 GMT -5
Okay, so I just posted the next chapter after the 'Oh! Holy heck, Batman!' section of the story. You can see now why I defined it outside of the social norm, but that's the beauty of the world of Powers and the huge capacity of my imagination...*anything* can happen. I admit I'm a little antsy after finally divulging Amelia's "destiny" since it's such a huge- and different- thing. Here's to hoping you gals don't hate it! LoL
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Post by .:*:Becka:*:. on Nov 26, 2007 16:13:23 GMT -5
eeeks we shall see...
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Post by magpie on Nov 27, 2007 3:03:44 GMT -5
Review chapter 17
My frikken jaw is still hanging on the ground. It was a very hot chapter,very hot indeed. Glad the boys all admitted their feelings to each other regarding Amelia and that they are just not ignoring it again.
Now however the nightly encounters... before I begin let me just say i think Pogue completely missed out and sadly so. I'll be honest and say it kind of freaked me out but in a totally "look how addicted I am to this fic" kinda way.
Im jus wanting to clear things up, okay so Anna is her and POgues daughter and then the only other people she ACTUALLY slept with is Caleb when she thought it was Reid in her dream right, but she never physically consumated her relationships with Reid or TYler except on some kind of spiritual plain. Yet quadruplets? Poor girl.
Im just wondering how Pogue is going to take this,you have made it empirically clear that even though she feels drawn to the other boys she LOVES Pogue,she is sure of it and Pogue loves her, this is going to really hurt him I think,Im already cringing at the fall out.Dang girl,you really can write.
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Post by Ellie on Nov 27, 2007 7:49:25 GMT -5
Le sigh- yes this is "drama of epic proportions" period of the story. Anna is definitely Pogue's daughter and through the other encounters- not all of them physical- she conceived other children with the other three. It's alllll a part of the prophecy, the crappy part is they had no way of foreseeing this particular aspect of it so...Overloaded Emotion City! Other than Pogue, Amelia did have sex with Caleb, which I hope was justified by the realistic dream she was having about her and Reid. On the whole, Tyler is the only one who probably doesn't feel like he got the wrong end of the stick. Caleb will hurt when he finds out the true reason why she had initiated the bed session, Reid is still beyond upset that it was "just a dream", and Pogue will feel betrayed and very volatile about the whole scenario. Everything will come to light in chapter 19- unfortunately, it's going to be a tough one for me to write. Amelia's going to lay all of the cards on the table- knowing she can't hold it in anymore and that they don't deserve not knowing everything she does. So you'll probably see the continuation toward the later part of the week. Hey Mags! Chapter 18 opens with the scene you specifically mentioned earlier wanting to read, so consider that a late Thanksgiving present Wait, that's Christmas... In the meantime, let's talk about the kids! Both Reid and Caleb's sons are the spitting images of their daddies. Since Tyler and Pogue produced females, they won't be *as* "spitting image". Mags, I'm so glad I have you addicted (I guess that makes me a fic-pimp of sorts?), but don't worry about Pogue and Amelia...there will be more happies- promise!!!
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Post by Maggie on Nov 27, 2007 8:21:26 GMT -5
These photos look GREAT!!!
btw, I figured Amelia was going to have Pogue's child Anna, just by reading THREE lines of your story: These are the ones that led me to figure it out!
"Anna...I Like it. I'm sure he will too."
"Who?"
"Pogue."
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Post by Ellie on Nov 27, 2007 19:20:08 GMT -5
Yeah, that rang many bells in reader's heads, hehe. I wasn't going to divulge Anna's identity so soon, but it just worked out that way...besides, she had to be identified before all of the other stuff happened, which was going to be very, very soon
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