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Post by magpie on Nov 11, 2007 18:53:09 GMT -5
Review for chapter 11...
Well, Im pretty spechless after what happened. I'll try not to reveal too much as to not spoil it for anyone.
Ellie that was superb, you had me holding my breath. It was such an action packed chapter...literally. Im so curious as to know what the heck happened at teh gazebo. As for what happened in the "cabin of carnal", all I can say is whoooohooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i just want to know what the reactions of the Covenant members are going to be...Im thinking Tyler might have a worse reaction tha tthe otehrs actually, he is the dark horse,its always the quiet ones.
And what is Pogue going to do when he finds out what Caleb did with Amelia behind the "drapes of infinite seclusion". The plot thickens.
As usual the writing is faultless,kudos to the proofreading praetorian I guess. Now all i want to know is ,when do we get the next update?
KarmaKarmaKarma!!!
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Post by magpie on Nov 11, 2007 19:13:25 GMT -5
Side Note: Ellie you should really consider posting this over at FanFiction.Net in teh Covenant section.
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Post by paladin on Nov 11, 2007 19:16:17 GMT -5
Just one request, Mags... Don't poke me with any sticks yet. I haven't received the next chapter yet. I can tell you, though, that Ellie's planning on working some more on the next chapter tonight. She got it started, but so far is only a paragraph in. A little patience will go a long way, though. ;D
For the record... I'm not usually one for fan fics. But I'm chompin' at the bit as much as you are for the next part. As soon as I get it, you bet your tush that I'm gonna be reading it.
Paladin aka The Praetorian Proofreader
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Post by magpie on Nov 11, 2007 19:22:40 GMT -5
Hehe...that can be your official forum title. Im very picky when it comes to fanFic since it is a genre that can so easily be just some mindless fluff, its rare to see someone write it as a whole and not simply a series of events considering their favorite characters.
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Post by Ellie on Nov 11, 2007 19:53:34 GMT -5
Wow, the pressure's building- but it's good pressure! Thanks, you two!
As to posting it on Fanfiction.net, we'll see how it turns out. Right now I still feel like a little goldfish in a huge ocean, hehehe =) I like the safety of my fishbowl for now, especially knowing that so far the reaction to it as been positive!
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Post by Ondra on Nov 11, 2007 20:54:08 GMT -5
Hey, I am about three chapters behind, but really Ellie, I think this would do great on fanfiction.net. I know I can't speak for everyone, but this is a great story with a great background and plotline. I don't see how it couldn't meet with success!
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Post by Ellie on Nov 11, 2007 21:00:15 GMT -5
My only worry (on the fanfiction.net thing) is that it will seem like a very similar plot to a whole bunch of other stories that include females (I checked out the 799 stories already posted under 'Covenant', holy cow! females galore!)...at least here it seems to stick out a little more, lol. But I guess we'll see *shrug*. As always, I appreciate the praise and encouragement- you have no idea what it means to me! (I have a fragile ego, but am my own worst critic, lol)
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Post by magpie on Nov 12, 2007 4:03:08 GMT -5
I can honestly say that nothing is quite like your plot,either style or story wise. I have waded through most of those fics looking for a good one,I think your fic will be much liked over there.
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Post by .:*:Becka:*:. on Nov 12, 2007 14:30:35 GMT -5
Hey, I am about three chapters behind, but really Ellie, I think this would do great on fanfiction.net. I know I can't speak for everyone, but this is a great story with a great background and plotline. I don't see how it couldn't meet with success!
<----- im with her... lol
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Post by Ellie on Nov 12, 2007 16:50:53 GMT -5
*blows multiple kisses as works furiously on completing another section*
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Post by .:*:Becka:*:. on Nov 12, 2007 18:50:12 GMT -5
wow, so much drama, i love it i love it i love it... i cant read the rest of it today but ill read more of it tomorrow i still have a couple chapters left. EXCELLENT WORK ELLIE! SIMPLY MARVELOUS... :-)
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Post by .:*:Becka:*:. on Nov 14, 2007 14:15:59 GMT -5
whoah! ellie slow down lol the pressure is building, eeekks whatever shall i do... i need to get time to read the rest...
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Post by magpie on Nov 14, 2007 17:53:51 GMT -5
Review for Chapter 13...
*shudders* that final line just about made me get a bad case of the goosebumps.
But lets start from the top...
I love the way you wrote Staughtons presence into it by not immediately introducing him to the readers and first making us guess...it a) makes me at least feel that you dont underestimate the intelligence of your readers and b) having the boys already familiar with him it makes us feel like we simply dropped into their lives at a random time so well done.
Things are really going to come to a head soon arent they...there is a thread of underlying tension that pulls tighter and tighter with each and every altercation between Reid and Pogue. It seems that these tow boys are destined for a huge fight.
Pogue and Amelia: Okay one word for those two..."awwwww" I loved the scenes of them together and her breaking down and crying because she realized she is in love with him was absolutely perfecto.
Now a plea...please dont let them "break" up...I mean sure angst them up and all that but I really want tehm to end up together. I think the biggest showdown will be between Reid and Pogue if all previous evidence were to be taken into account. Im still waiting for Caleb to just explode though...I mean,he did kiss the girl and she kissed back so how is that going to add to the dynamic.
The most presing question i have now is how will the other boys find out about Pogue and Amelia...caught in the act...a stray piece of lingerie...her walking around in pogues T-Shirt (*all very plausible way believe me (-: )
I must say I didnt like the foreshadowing of Tyler "breaking away" from the Covenant or of the COvenant losing a member either in death or in disagreement (dont you just love alliterarion)
So yeah,one of your best chapters to date....you weave a tangled web millady...one I have every intention of unraveling.
So my final thought...out of Amelia and Pogue, I think Pogue is more succeptable to having his heart torn out by what I am sure will be Amelia's conflicting emotions still to come,because yes she does have a connection with the other boys as well.
Oh and the Pogue text...one word, "squeeeeeee"
The witch text...really really freaky.
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Post by Ellie on Nov 14, 2007 22:53:22 GMT -5
You know, the last paragraph wasn't originally even in the chapter- I added it after a moment's reflection before posting the chapter to the forum...I'm glad I added it though, proud of me! And yes, you will enjoy more Pogue and Amelia...but as forementioned, there will be other issues...stay tuned! Next chapter is almost complete Thankies, Mags & Becky!!
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Post by .:*:Becka:*:. on Nov 15, 2007 14:27:54 GMT -5
Ur welcome, so far its great, ur definitely keeping me on my toes and anxious of whats next, ay ay ay... whats going to happen, eeekkks!!!
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