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Post by Ondra on Nov 7, 2007 20:21:10 GMT -5
I would love to be in Amelia's shoes right about now. Four guys practically fighting over you and finding out whaqt she is capable of.
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Post by .:*:Becka:*:. on Nov 8, 2007 17:29:20 GMT -5
sometimes guys fighting over u isnt so xciting, its flattering, yes! take it from someone who knows, but its when you lose the friendship that makes it the hardest, to me "friends are forever" just becuz u dnt talk to them for long periods of time dnt mean anything, friends will always be there when u need them. "true friends" that is...
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Post by magpie on Nov 8, 2007 18:38:15 GMT -5
"OH my prophetic soul." That was sure as heck one hot chapter. Okay if you were to ask me right now who i though Amelia should end up with it would have to be Pogue,,,you cant "red herring" chemistry like that. on the other hand I have yet to read her encounters with Reid (gulps) and Caleb (*swoons*) so yeah but the way you write Amelia and Pgue together, well there is something dark and intense there and i like dark and intense.
Your style of writing cant be faulted at all, you have great grammar and spelling whic is always a nice and rare thing to find in the ficverse so two big thumbs up.
Kudos kudos kudos!!!
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Post by Ondra on Nov 8, 2007 21:21:44 GMT -5
What Mag said!!! I completely agree
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Post by Ellie on Nov 9, 2007 7:39:34 GMT -5
Just you wait, girls.... *grins* I think this growing novella has me possessed, lol. I have much, much more to add as soon as I can get my proofreader into gear. He can only read a chapter at a time, yadda-yadda-yadda...*sigh* So stay tuned! I'll try to have another up by later tonight As always, *I* love that *you* are loving it- that's any writer's dream!! Kisses for you!!
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Post by magpie on Nov 9, 2007 8:05:53 GMT -5
COme on Ellie...we need some teasers, like they do in the ads for TV shows...Will Ellie succumb to Pogues charms, Will Tyler be the dark horse and will Caleb or Reid actually catch on?
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Post by Ellie on Nov 9, 2007 19:07:23 GMT -5
Well...surprises are a good thing, right??? This is all I can tell you at this point...Amelia obviously has a connection with all of the guys, but how far will the connections go? Who will be the first to go the distance to prove how he feels about her? What will happen at the Fall Dance- the exact night Caleb ascends? Stay tuned!!
(As I mentioned before, one section will be posted hopefully within a couple of hours and another will be posted sometime tomorrow. I'm writing as much as I'm able to get away with, so I'm really using the whip on my proofreader lately!!)
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Post by magpie on Nov 10, 2007 7:03:25 GMT -5
Okay my review for chapter 9....
Obviously i loved it. I love how uncertain Amelia is still being about everything, I mean if she was some wise-cracking-I-know-i-have-the-power-Sue then i might have been less inclined to read the fic. Your characters are complex for example that you give Tyler an actual personality with actual reactions, that Reid can become flustered by a mere girl and that Caleb is trying to hold on to his stoicism but it seems a losing battle. Pogue,well Pogue is simply electric in my opinion, you are actually making me root for him the way you write his character, now as someone who is completely adoring of the Caleb character that says a lot.
The fact that you keep us guessing is another plus-point,I still have NO idea who Amelia is going to end up with. I am more and more convinced that should it either be Caleb or Pogue there will still be a big fight, Reid for all his volatile machismo wont force Amelia to feel something she doesnt but this early on in the "novel" its clear that Caleb and Pogue feel very strongly about her.
LOVE IT!
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Post by magpie on Nov 10, 2007 7:32:31 GMT -5
Review for Chapter 10...
Thank you for delving into the homelives of the Ipswich boys, backgroubd helps to create well rounded characters as my professor would always say. I am very curious to learn more about Pogue,Reid and Tyler's lives and even have some new material on Caleb and his mum.
I really liked how you handled the bit of Kate/Amelia drama, the jumping to conclusions, the settling of conscience, all done very nicely. You didnt have KAte revert back to b*tch territory immediately just because of a few assumptions on her part anyway.
I would really like to know however what went down with Amelia and Pogue. The other three boys not feelinf well,sweaty and dizzy and pogue,not feeling anything like that at all. Im working on my own theory in all its delicious detail but im sure its just a theory.
So yeah,another great chapter, c'est tres bien mademoiselle.Bravo.
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Post by Ellie on Nov 10, 2007 12:49:52 GMT -5
You are a very insightful reader, Mags!! I'm aware that I kinda left Pogue and Amelia out of the loop when the other three were feeling like something strange was going on...there's a power brewing in Ipswich which will be revealed in the not-too-distant future...however, I feel no remorse in letting you know that I- for one- will not be going the Chase route. That's been done to death in other fics from what I've seen, and we already saw it done in the movie. Therefore, something else will be stirring up trouble for the teens... I must admit I myself am very Amelia/Pogue, although with how Amelia is carved out and how the storyline is progressing, it won't be as easy as just Amelia/Pogue or Amelia/Tyler, etc. You'll have to wait and see on that one I'll have a new chapter up today and I just finished a massively long one that awaits touch-ups and a proofread then I will rush it onto the 'net!!!
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Post by magpie on Nov 10, 2007 16:28:53 GMT -5
rushrushrush...and be pro Pogue/Amelia, for now at least thats what Im liking.
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Post by Ellie on Nov 10, 2007 17:49:30 GMT -5
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Post by magpie on Nov 10, 2007 17:53:30 GMT -5
Review chapter 11...
Oh poor Caleb, I liked how you focussed mainly on his state of mind in this chapter. He really does carry alot with him. Oh and thanks for giving a bit of insight into his homelife, i htink you did it well. Dealing with parents with either addictions or other types of problems is never easy,and contrary to popular belief such behaviour usually make sthe kids stronger rather than more dramatic.
I'd also like to know wheter there was any foreshadowing in the mentioning of the previous Covenant's fall out, if so,things dont look to good.
Caleb's dual feelings towards Pogue was sweet,funny and sad at the same time. He admitted that he supported Pogue but still wanted to deck him as well. Caleb is such a caregiver,always worrying about the others...the backlash isnt going to be good should Caleb decide to GO for it with Amelia.
Thanks for keeping Kate in the story, i like the little mentions and imagery that you draw from the movie,it kind of anchors you to the story a bit more which is very nice.
Now,I honestly am on tenterhooks for the dance,a masque can only be dramadramadrama. Personally Id like to see Pogue and Amelia get it on in a janitors closet but thats just me.Youre the writer, and a wonderful one at that.
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Post by paladin on Nov 11, 2007 1:08:27 GMT -5
OW OW OW OUCHIE!!!!!!!!!!! That hurt. Resident proof reader runs for the hills and refuses to help any further. Those sticks hurt. Just kidding. Like I said in my introduction, taking my time means that I don't miss anything and it's all the more enjoyable to the readers. I promise that I will read any supplements that Ellie writes in a "reasonable" time frame so as not to string the readers along too far.
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Post by paladin on Nov 11, 2007 2:57:13 GMT -5
Alrighty.... everyone. I just got done reading the next section (section 11) and all I can say is..... D A M N! Now don't worry. It's a good thing. I can pretty well say that Ellie's gonna have it posted tomorrow... or is that later today. *Looks at clock* It's almost 2am here and Ellie's already off to bed. So, within 12 hours or so it should be up. Hope you can all keep yourselves in control until then. *Evil smile*
Paladin
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