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Post by Ondra on Mar 31, 2008 22:22:47 GMT -5
Hey, the longer the better for me!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by urithraviel on Apr 1, 2008 2:26:10 GMT -5
lol. Let me continue, then.
You didn't feel anything once you had fallen out. Warren sat in his seat, with you in his arms. "Omygod, she fainted." Voices grew as students stood to see what had happened. "Someone do CPR." How stupid could people get? He checked your pulse to make sure you were breathing. "Do something!" All eyes watched him, expecting him to do something, since she fell into his lap. With a sigh, he easily lifted your limp body and started down the bleachers with you. More students stood and the gym was full of commotion by the time Warren was halfway down the steps. Coach Boomer stopped him at the bottom. "Where do you think you're going?" Was he blind? Did he seriously not see the unconscious girl in his arms? "She needs to get to the nurse." "You need to get, back to your seat, young man." Warren held his position, he didn't like the tone Coach Boomer had. "Or maybe you want a reason to skip the brain reading." The Coach took a step closer. "I wasn't going to get one in the first place, now, if you'll excuse me, I need to get her to the nurse's." "I don't think so." Apparently, the Coach didn't like any backtalk. Warren wanted to keep his cool, especially since he had someone in his hands, but that was becoming more difficult with Boomer in his way. Principal Powers was headed their way with a concerned look on her face. "This kid is trying to skip the brain reading. I think he's got something to hide." "If I wrote it, I would've left my signature at least." Warren scoffed. "If you refuse to do the reading then you'll have detention." Principal Powers offered. Warren couldn't believe his luck. He looked down into the unconscious face in his arms. This was the girl who was at the Paper Latern last night. The one who nearly permantly damaged his 'stuff', then had the nerve to make him chase her through the halls. Why was he doing this? "May I get her to the nurse's now?" Principal Powers and Coach Boomer looked at each other before Principal Powers nodded her head. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
You woke up with a headache. Where the hell were you? Was all of that a dream? Was that whole Gwen kissing Warren, you writing on Gwen's locker, and the assembly a dream. You sit up in the nurse's room and smile. It must've been. "Feeling better?" You turned to see Principal Powers smiling at you. Your brain froze as you force a smile. She was the only one in the room. You look around nervously. "You passed out during the brain reading." She was staring at you. Could she read minds as well. "Really? It was really hot in there and I skipped breakfast." You needed to get the hell out of there fast! You sit up straight but then hold your head. If you acted fine, then you'd just be back in the gym waiting for everyone to see your thoughts on the big screen. "What time is it?" "Lunch will be over in ten minutes." "Wow, I was out that long." "Yes, you missed the brain reading completly." Why didn't that sound like good news to you. You try to look concerned. "Did you find out who did it?" "No, a number of student's refused to take the scan, so it could be either one of them." Hopefully that number was really high. "But from the one's we did scan, nothing came up about the locker. A lot of 'other' things did, but nothing we were looking for." That was not the end of it, you knew it by her face. "So all the students who refused the scan will have detention today." Did she mean you as well? You didn't want to ask, but you had this sinking feeling it did. She stood up to leave then turned. "You know, we caught a video of the student, and guess what?" You look up to meet her eyes. "They were invisible. The writing just appeared out of nowhere." You do your best not to bite you lip or look so suprised. "oh, really?" You managed to whisper out. "Yeah, good thing we have the cloaked camera's to see the invisible students running around." Your mouth hangs open and you shut it slowly. "I expect you to be at the detention room in ten minutes." She left the room and shut the door behind her silently. You hold your hand up to your mouth. She knew, who did she tell? You didn't want to leave the safety of the nurse's bland room, but the ten minutes was passing quickly. What if when you stepped outside, everyone knew? You could feel the dizzy spells returning. This was not your idea of a good day! The bell rings and it takes everything in you to stand up and open the door. If you walk real quickly then maybe no one will notice you. You hurry down the hall, keeping eyes on the tile floor. People were talking, but not about you. Apparently, the students who had been scanned thought of their deepest secret and in turn broadcasted it to the whole school. Crushes, crimes, and thoughts spilled out. The boatload of gossip was letting you slip by. You head down the stairs to the detention room while wondering who else got it? You only had two hours of school left so, it wouldn't be that bad? Your legs are growing tired of so many stairs. What if Principal Powers does tell everyone? Will Gwen kill you? Will her posse kill you? Will everyone think you're a jealous lying skank? You cover your face. What would Warren think? You stop in midstep as you realize that if Principal Powers tells then that means he'd know you were invisible when they were at the stairs. You make a prayer right there. "Don't let her tell. PLEASE! PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE!" You turn the corner. Two hours in detention wasn't so bad. You rub the back of your calf as you continue down the hall. "I wonder who else--" you stop as you notice Warren Peace leaning back on the wall facing the detention room. His arms crossed across his broad chest. You look around, was this the right hall? Yes, the rooms were numbered correctly. Warren turns his head and stares at you. You could run, he won't chase you, will he? You try to calmly turn around but as you do so three other students, with Principal Powers not too far away, are headed towards the detention room. You have no choice. Taking a deep breath, you turn back around to find Warren's eyes still on you. Your legs melt slightly and you have to think before you can start walking toward him. You take your time, not wanting to be standing near him for any longer than ten seconds. Even though your eyes are on the ground, you know his staring at you. You can feel his eyes burning holes into your head. You look up, he's still staring. Damn. You give a weak smile, but nothing in his face changes. "Welcome to Detention." Principal Powers smiles to everyone. A redheaded hippie, a nerd, and a male student you knew only as Will join you. None of them look to happy to be here, but who would be. "You will spend the next eight hours thinking about what you did that got you in here." Eight hours! "Ma'am," the nerd spoke up, "we only have two hours of school left." "Yes, I know. But in here," she motioned to the white door, "I can give you as many hours as I want and you'll come out when I want. Eight hours, and you'll go home at five." Was she freaking serious! Eight hours in a room with these guys? The other three didn't seem that bad but Warren.... you glance at Warren who turns to meet your eyes but you turn back away. You can't do it. You can't do it. What if they find out? They are bound to ask why you're in detention. Then after that they'll ask you why you did it and then..... You wish you could faint again, but its not coming. The door opened and you all enter to find five desks waiting for you in the blank room. You enter the room and sit in the last seat, watching Warren as he takes the furthest from you. This could turn out okay. You try to convince yourself. You could end up actually talking to the beautiful man in front of you. But one glance from his cold dark eyes told you, this was not going to end pretty. The door shut and automatically locked beginning your eight hours.
Part Two will be up shortly. THE DETENTION ROOM inspired slightly by the breakfast club.
c'mon you guys i need some feedback, feedback oh.
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Post by .:*:Becka:*:. on Apr 1, 2008 15:10:44 GMT -5
I really liked how you got warrens character to go with him perfectly... i like how u talked about the girl and how nervous she was and how she became invisible to the world and how she got back at gwenn for kissing warren, i think its really cute how u added her fainting in his arms at the gym but i think i liked it more when he actually showed a kind side to him when he noticed that she was the one from the paper lantern, and how she almost permanently damaged his "stuff" LOL and how he asked himself "why am i doing this" lol i thot it was really cute, it totally shows that warren is a nice guy but tries to bluff by playing "Mr. Bully" OMG im dying to find out what happens to them now since their 8 hrs have started... will they kill eachother? will they front? will they fight? will they argue? will they fall asleep? will they kiss? will they end up all naked in the detention room? u know kinda like the breakfast club where they all ended up liking eachother... hehe but maybe this one might be slightly different... hehe ;-)
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Post by .:*:Becka:*:. on Apr 1, 2008 15:16:09 GMT -5
... i also forgot to add how i cant help to think that in this story ur kinda making warren come out to be like a "playa" lol simply becuz of the kiss with gwenn and how it had no affect on him at all... it just made it seem like he gets plenty play and how he doesnt really care about a kiss... this i also noticed in "Undiscovered" how Lukes bro says "Lukes just taking a ride" lol i totally liked that part it makes him seem so "playa-ish" lol but honestly i totally agree with the character... Meh its justa kiss!!! LOL
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Post by Ondra on Apr 1, 2008 22:21:42 GMT -5
Great Job and I can't wait to see how you incorporate Breakfast Club. That is one of my favorite movies, it's a classic!! Keep up the great work!!!!!!!!!!!
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Post by stevensfan on Apr 8, 2008 21:51:41 GMT -5
I love this is awesome. Great job!! Keep it up can't wait
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Post by Cindy on Apr 10, 2008 21:59:43 GMT -5
Great Job!!! I'm looking forward to the next chapter I <3 that you've given the bad boy some good guy qualities Gotta love the bad boys *sigh*
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Post by stevensfan on Apr 11, 2008 3:45:00 GMT -5
Yup true to that very good. Can't wait
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